Hello! I'm responding to a request from Project Comment.

First, I'm going to comment on what you requested: whether this was realistic and an odd perspective.

I thought this was really realistic. You described the situation really well and I enjoyed reading it because not only where you concise and coherent throughout the story, it was exciting and intriguing as well! (Especially at the naked scene, love it!) As for an odd perspective, I don't think so. It's not odd because this is something that could and has happened it real life--when someone walks in on someone naked. I don't see how that is odd, unless you wanted to make Edgar have a weird fetish.

Anyways, there were a few instances when I was confused. The first instance was in the sentence that starts "Evo..." I'm not sure why "Evo and his little thugs" are going to confront "him" who I believe is Edgar, so maybe a little more clarity there. I also didn't understand the context of "butterfly wings" and at that point, because you had asked if this was realistic, I was thinking it might turn into an X-men/superhero story, but the rest of the story didn't conform that suspicion. I'd try to rework that sentence starting at "butterfly wings" to the end, because I'm not sure either about the shape shifters and electric pulses. ( In the beginning of the story, in "knew" you have a typo)

I think after that, and once the story starts on the naked scene, you really have a good idea of what you are trying to convey. I like the idea of breasts being orbs, because in this context it doesn't sound too weird (I can't think of the word I want to use there, but weird is close enough) and is just erotic enough as well. The only point in this section I have to bring attention to is " Edgar twitched. As she did she stuck out her firm rear end." I understand what is happening in the scene, but as I read it is confused me. Possibly did you mean "As he did..." ?

Overall, I thought this was a great piece and an enjoyable read. Actually, I'd like to read more (especially if there is a sex scene...)

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